Ok, now that I've read your script I can see more of how you want to do this. I have several questions though. How do these three get recruited? They are kids. Why would someone unknown call Dalson out of the blue and then recruit them to fight the bad guys? There has to be some other backstory to your group. Maybe they were part of a secret group of kids that have been trained as special agents since they were babies. They now live on Kauai with their families and are called from time to time to fight bad guys like this. The Anti Masters want to destroy the most beautiful place on earth to make a statement to the world, their home, and they can't let that happen. You'll need to explain though why the bad guys are kids too. Unless you plan to get adults to be your bad guys. There has to be a reason they are kids too though so figure that out. At least this way, if the good guys are special agents, this call doesn't come out of the blue like it does now. That would explain why they got the phone call and that this is not some crazy plan. The team can't just take the job because it sounds fun. Who does that? Who would want to battle bad guys and potentially die in the process if they don't succeed? That does not sound fun to me. If you make the good guys part of a special group, once the leader gets the call he can contact the entire group in some cool way, like maybe they could all have special phone/communicator watches or something like that. Then you could cut to scenes where the team gets the call from the leader to meet at the HQ as they got their next mission.
This storyline needs to be better thought out. Once they hear that the bad guys are on their island, their home, how do they go about fighting them? How do they find the bombs? How do they know that this is what the bad guys are planning? Does this come from the intel their bosses send the team? Does the Hacker go to work trying to find out? The Hacker could hack into security cams around the island. I don't know how they find the bombs but they need a better story as to how they do it instead of just showing up at the house somehow with hardly any work. You also need more sequences in your shot list. That one scene in which the team assembles for the first time across the street of the house, you don't break down the shots on the left of your script. You should be showing each shot, shot by shot and what exactly we see and hear in them.
Finally, you need to work on your ending. It seems too easy for the team. Where's the suspense? Don't they come across any problems in trying to diffuse the bombs? There's no suspense in your story. They basically come in, diffuse the bombs, and it ends. There needs to be some problem or problems that the team encounters along the way. Maybe the hacker is having a hard time with finding the bombs, maybe the security guy is outnumbered, whatever, but the team needs to face some problems along the way before winning at the end. How do they finish this? Do they capture the bad guys? Do the bad guys get away and that's how the story can continue in a sequel? This script really needs more work.
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