Excluding PSA from Kaden Keep on Vimeo.
You have some very noticeable audio issues here. The hiss is loud and then goes in and out and you cut some speaking in mid sentence. Your audio definitely needs some improvement. Shot compositions and sequences were good. They weren't great as you needed a different shot at the end. When we spoke I suggested you show the person's feet dangling. That is clear. You can tell when seeing feet dangling that the person is hanging. Your shot shows the mid section of the boy. Where are his arms? If he's really hanging from a tree wouldn't his arms be down at his side? If you used a shot of just his feet dangling, then you wouldn't need to worry about where his hands are. That's where your message fell apart. Instead of hitting that home run at the end to win the game, that last shot was more like a single. Ok, but not the effect you wanted. Overall this is a 3 or a B.
I am in 7th grade in my school's Advanced Media class. I love this class and I have been having lots of fun in it. This past year we went to Florida, where STN was held. Next year it will be in San Diego, California.